Monday, March 11, 2013

A Swig of Suspicion

I woke up quite suddenly and noticed that the sun was slightly lower in the sky than it had been. I seemed to have dozed off. Then I remembered where I was and why I was there. I glanced at the dentist's shop and then up the road a short ways where two mules, a young boy, and the more shy of the two men I had seen earlier were plodding along. I had no desire to miss my opportunity to get at least some scrap of writing material out of him and I was far too lazy to try to pursue new avenues of interest. I got up and set off at a quick pace in order to overtake him and his companion.

When I was a stone's throw from them at most the wary man pulled a drink from a case and took a swig. I would not have made much of it save that he took special care to conceal it from the boy. That could only mean one thing. He had some form of alcohol. The Mexican government, along with banning Catholicism which resulted in the killing of countless priests, had also placed a ban on alcohol. Now my interests had been truly piqued.

I hurried to catch up to him. The man was looking down at his case again. He seemed to be missing something. He gave a start when I came up beside him and immediately snapped the case shut. The boy hardly gave me a second glance. I asked him where he was going and upon hearing his answer exclaimed excitedly that our destinations were the same. I began asking him all manner of innocent questions to warm him up. Yet, no matter how many I asked, he barely warmed up at all. I felt like he saw right through my innocuous small talk. I changed tactics. I asked him what he had in his case. He said it was none of my business. I asked him what he would do if I told the authorities that I suspected he had alcohol in it. His face grew ever so slightly pale, but he retained his composure. The man said I had no such proof and I could not go about everywhere just throwing out bold accusations. I gave a well-practiced false laugh and told him I had only been joking. Deciding it was not wise to press the matter at the moment, I diverged to different topics in another unsuccessful attempt to relax his inhibitions (no pun intended).

We soon entered the town where we were to stop. It was getting dark and I thought it unwise to stay with him. I broke off down a side street exclaiming false goodbyes. I had no intention of letting the only interesting and perhaps even scandalous tidbit of news I had had all month slip through my fingers. I quickly circled back round to find this suspicious man once more. After a lengthy and uneventful visit to the mule-boy's home, my suspect set out on his own. He came to a house by the river and appeared to be asking a small girl for a favor. She pointed to a barn. The man walked toward it, casting a glance over his shoulder as he did so. I slipped behind a neighboring house before his eye could catch me. Truly this was a curious thing.

5 comments:

  1. So, because of the sheer quantity of reading I would have to do, I was about to skip your blog and go read someone elses. Then the title was "A Swig of Suspicion" And when I read it I couldn't shake the curiosity. Dang it, Nathan! You and your excellent choice of title. My act of vengeance is to make this comment obnoxiously interesting and long so that you can't help NOT reading it. Mwahaha.
    I like how you basically wrote..as you. The way the journalist is hesitant and tired, but duty driven to finish the job he came to do, yet once he works up the motivation to do it he doesn't have the warmth or people skills to get the information he needs. :) Oh the subconscious. How it reveals us so.
    One thing I do need clarification on though:
    Who was the boy? Are you referring to Mr. Tench, the little boy Juan or did you make this character up for funzies? Now that I think about it, you probably mean the boy Juan. That's okay, this is helping my vengeance.
    Great use of vocab *innocuous* and complex sentence structure and the like. You sounded real fancy. "I thought it unwise to stay with him" Gah... just.. so typical Nathan: I love it.
    You Done Good. :)

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  2. Thanks, Rachael. It's so weird for us to be complementing each other. O.o And the boy was the one who came to Mr. Tench's place of work to try to get the Whiskey Priest to come with him to help his mother. And, to be fair, your post (the one I read) was very well written. We have very distinctly different styles though. But I think that makes it easier for us to appreciate each other's writing in some ways.

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    1. LOL
      It's pretty bad when it's weird for us to compliment each other. gah.... Yeah, as I was writing the question I realized that you meant Juan (the little boy who came to the dentist house) but I just left the question there to make the comment longer ;) he he..
      And yes, though our styles are really different, I do appreciate the you-ness of your writing as you do mine.
      I find everyone's blogs completely hilarious just because the writing styles are SO, SO distinctive. It's great.

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  3. I hadn't really analyzed my character...because I just sort of wrote it...but now I see why he is the way he is. He's basically me...like you said...*exasperated sigh*

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  4. Nathan, You are doing a nice job presenting yourself at someone trying to 'figure out' what's going on. Make sure you have enough facts in your blog.

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